01 November, 2010

Poisoned Fruit

She saw it,
Blinking, blinking, blinking.
What was it she wondered,
Thinking, thinking, thinking.

If she could just reach it,
Stretching, stretching, stretching.
It kept escaping her,
Tempting, tempting, tempting.

"This isn't fair" she said,
Screaming, screaming, screaming.
"It belongs to me",
Yearning, yearning, yearning.

"I'll get it one day",
Hoping, hoping, hoping.
Sooner or later she felt,
Praying, praying, praying.

Years passed by,
Waiting, waiting, waiting.
It came to her in disguise,
Amazing, amazing, amazing.

Finally in her grasp,
Gloating, gloating, gloating.
Until her senses it snapped,
Tormenting, tormenting, tormenting.

It swamped her with misery,
Choking, choking, choking.
She lay on the frozen floor,
Numbing, numbing, numbing.

"Leave me alone" she whispered,
Fighting, fighting, fighting.
"I've learnt it all" she said,
Knowing, knowing, knowing.

Stood up on her feet,
Breathing, breathing, breathing.
Confidently stepped forward,
Accepting, accepting, accepting.

Happily she smiled,
Bubbling, bubbling, bubbling.
Still more lessons to be learnt,
Welcoming, welcoming, welcoming.


Venice :)

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  1. Nice Nice Nice ...I like the 3 word lines

  2. A bittersweet lesson...

    on a lighter side, I'd compare it to marriages, as they compare it on TV

    Who doesn't eat this fruit, longs for it,
    those who do, its a lesson,
    good or bad, that depends.


    Blasphemous Aesthete

  3. Thanks Jidhu... it does get a bit repetitive though, doesn't it?

  4. Hey BA: Nice... and quite true... the grass always seems to be a wee bit greener on the other side.. we don't know what we want until we actually experience it.

  5. hi there venice..nice poem...never read anything with those sort of repetition but its adding to the effect..and the message here is still disguised i aint sure wat exactly the person is yearning for..but its true...we always enjoy the chase more than getting wat we run after once we get that...its value is depriciated..nice nice nice work :)

  6. She wanted it, did she?
    To know the unknown.
    She acquired it, did she?
    To own what she didn't own.

    Wisdom, maybe-
    Seeping, seeping seeping.
    Grasp, will she?
    Dreading, dreading, dreading.

    Nice poem. :)

  7. Hey Chetan... you got it right.. the repetition is to emphasize the main feelings, thoughts that go though our minds when we desire something passionately.

    I've left the 'desire' disguised because, each person has their own set of desires... so, the reader can relate to it in his/her individual way.

    You've interpreted it quite nicely - in your own style... that's really nice!

    See you around Chetan!! :)

  8. Hi Sayak! Nice to see you here :) and I admire the way you've understood the poem... plus, your poetry, well... if this were Facebook I would say "I 'double' like" :D

    The poem is open to the reader's perspective, views and interpretations. It's interesting to know how other people view the same object differently!

  9. vineet loves d poem
    clapping clapping clapping
    wanna more poems frm u
    waiting waitng waiting

  10. I just remember the second line of each paragraph !!

  11. Hi Venice,
    Back here after a long time.I liked the simple repeats.It captured my attention,very different from the jumble of rhymes we all make:)


  12. a fairy tale with a fatal truth...

    Come along and join the challenge to think beyond...visit the linkhttp://wizardmeetsvagabond.blogspot.com/2010/06/recall_11.htmland share your own imagination triggered by the image...the comment section is waiting for you....

    "Helping readers to think and increase their imagination power so that they can express their thoughts better"

  13. Vineet: Haaah haaa, nice to see the tune and words have been imprinted on you... will surely write some more poems/articles soon!

  14. Hi Srikant... I've tried to write the poem in a different way... and though when I re-read the poem, there is a lot of repetition with the second lines of each para, but then that's what makes the poem different from others.

    Nice of you to come and read my poem! Cheers :)

  15. Heya Raksha... yeah, I am currently trying to explore my writing skills, so I try to think how I can bring something different for my readers.

    Glad that you found it interesting! Me happy :)

  16. Hi W & V: Checked out your site... nice work!! The images are fantastic and the writing is so heartfelt! Cheers on the good work! :)


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